Revising For Conciseness

Question 1

What are three styles that often conflict each other?

Answer 1

1. Personal style
2. Disciplinary style
3. Cognitive style

Question 2

What is nominalisation?

Answer 2

Turning a verb into a noun

Question 3

Examples of nominalisation?

Answer 3

Requirement
Imposition
Discussion
Resemblance
Removal
Fear

Question 4

What is nominal or verb continuum?

Answer 4

Transition from noun based to verb based style: nouns, adjectives, adverbs, verbals, verbs.
E.g., production->productive->productively->to produce/producing->produces

Explanation->explanatory->to explain/explaining->explains

Immediacy->immediate->immediately

Question 5

What are examples of talkie or descriptive verbs?

Answer 5

Be, drive, go, look, seem, bring, face, grow, make, show, carry, feel, have, place, take, come, find, hold, put, think, deal, get, keep, say, try, do, give, know, see, turn.

The thief exists/is in the house.
Yesterday, Josey made 300 dollars.

Question 6

What is wrong with the following and how do we fix them?

Her report makes a recommendation that we do a study of the problem.
The committee had made the following series of recommendations.
The term “domain expertise” is used to describe some of the responses we can make.
Because of the team’s ignorance, no one could know at the beginning what the product was going to look like or how long it was going to take them to make it.

Answer 6

Descriptive verbs:
Her report recommends we study the problem.
The committee recommended the following:
The term “domain expertise” describes some of the responses we can make.
Because of the team’s ignorance, no one cold predict the product’s design or the time required to create it.

Question 7

What is wrong with the following and how do we fix them?
Hence, there is a distinct diurnal and seasonal variation in the air mass stability and dispersion characteristics.
Many engineering personnel have made comments regarding a lack of knowledge about what new information is available in the library as literature I’d filed into the library without any sort of notification.
The removal of reduced sulfur compounds from in-mill processes and the prevention of anaerobic formation of reduced sulfur compounds will improve both air and effluent quality.

Answer 7

Verbal styles(noun based form):
Hence, the air mass stability and dispersion characteristics vary daily and seasonally.
Many engineers have commented about not being notified when new literature is filed in the library.
Removing reduced sulfur compounds from in-mill processes and preventing anaerobic formation of reduced sulfur compounds will improve both air and effluent quality.

Question 8

Examples of wordy phrases.

Answer 8

Are indicative of->indicate
Form a consensus of opinion->agree
Has the ability to ->can
It is evident that->obviously
Make a decision->decide
The reason why is that->because
The preponderance of->most
It is necessary that someone->someone must

Question 9

Examples of wordy phrases and how to fix them.
This meteorological data file as chosen due to the fact that the mill is also located on the north side of the valley.

This report is an attempt to identify those areas that could be improved and make recommendations on how they might change for the better.

It is necessary that someone make a decision on a personal basis due to the fact that the preponderance of us cannot form a consensus of opinion about how to bring the matter to a conclusion.

Answer 9

This meteorological data file as chosen because the mill is also located on the north side of the valley.
This report identifies areas to improve and recommend changes.
Someone must decide because we cannot agree on how to resolve the debate.